Subject-verb and antecedent agreement are important parts of effective writing. Harmony and grammatical agreement allow readers to move through a story without running into awkward phrasings. This type of agreement in sentence structure is called parallelism.
In the example above, we see a sentence without parallel structure. The verbs (use, finds and keep) do not match forms and make for an awkward read. The way the sentence is written now also takes away the meaning of the sentence.
In order to make the verb forms match and the sentence readily understood, it should read: "Unlike typical raffles, players use a portable touch screen, choose a number, find out if they have won instantly and decide if they would like to keep playing."
The full article for this story can be found on Page 7 of the Nov. 24 issue of Joliet's Herald News.
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